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Advice/Thoughts on Story I'm Writing
« on: May 10, 2009, 07:53:10 AM »
Well folks, I realize it's been AGES since I last posted on this board, but I still drop in and read the threads. Anyway, I am working on a story and wanted opinions and advice on it.

It's about a young woman who finds a mysterious cotton dress which she plans on using for a figure skating costume. It looks like it is from the 1950s, but what she finds out is that the dress has been altered over the years, but never destroyed. The dress is actually from 1918, and was worn by an Imperial Russian skating star. My plan is that the dress is cursed, it transports the heroine to 1918 and events in the skater's life, and as she finds out more about her, she wonders who could have killed her. There are several possibilities, several people could have motives to kill her. What is eventually discovered is that the skater's husband had something to do with the telegram that gave the order to execute the Imperial Family... Another twist on this is that Liza's brother was, in fact, the Officer (I know he was a fictitious creation by the Bolsheviks but in the story I think I can take a little artistic license) and she decides to warn him, but her husband finds out, thus giving him reason to be the one who actually kills her. So the heroine Kaitlyn finds all this out in an effort to save herself from the same fate that Liza had. There is a MAJOR twist in the end that I cannot give away for the sake of those who want to read it, but I've said basically all that needs to be said.

It's probably a pretty sloppy plotline, but that's what I am thinking so far for it. Any questions, comments, advice is welcome.
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« Reply #1 on: May 10, 2009, 11:23:43 AM »
It sounds very interesting, I'd like to read the entire story when it will completed.
I like to write stories, and this is exactly the style of stories that I like to write...so, keep this project alive!  ;)

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« Reply #2 on: May 10, 2009, 12:49:58 PM »
Agree with Pier.....It sounds so fascinated....Would like to read it all :)

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Re: Advice/Thoughts on Story I'm Writing
« Reply #3 on: May 10, 2009, 02:20:28 PM »
Well, here is what I have so far, for those interested. Nice to feel encouraged!

http://www.mikeys-madhouse.proboards.com/index.cgi?board=stories&action=display&thread=302&page=1
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« Reply #4 on: May 10, 2009, 02:28:48 PM »
I've only read the summary you made for your story, and that absolutely looks fascinating. That's an extremely good basis for your story. I'll read the part you've just posted and I'll tell you what I think.

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« Reply #5 on: May 11, 2009, 08:20:35 AM »
Well, here is what I have so far, for those interested. Nice to feel encouraged!

http://www.mikeys-madhouse.proboards.com/index.cgi?board=stories&action=display&thread=302&page=1

Excellent job!...I love your story!, the plot is perfect, the characters are fantastic, it's very exciting, you have talent!  :)
I read more than half of the story, I'm going to read the rest later.




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Re: Advice/Thoughts on Story I'm Writing
« Reply #6 on: May 11, 2009, 08:32:38 AM »
Thanks! I of course have no permission to use Yagudin's or Tarasova's names but for the purposes of a story such as this posted on a friend's forum I don't think it matters! *grin* Glad you are enjoying it so far. I am seriously considering deleting the last paragraph and posting some more things on Elizaveta herself (it is HER Wikipedia page after all) When you read the rest you'll understand and I hope you can give some advice!
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« Reply #7 on: May 11, 2009, 09:36:11 AM »
I read the rest of the story right now...it's brilliant and original!, I like it very much!  :)

Well, if you have more informations about Elizaveta, it would be a good idea to add them...but however, the story is already perfect in my opinion...

When the second part of the story?, I'd like to read it... ;)
« Last Edit: May 11, 2009, 09:42:15 AM by RomanovsFan4Ever »

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Re: Advice/Thoughts on Story I'm Writing
« Reply #8 on: May 11, 2009, 12:09:58 PM »
I think I may edit that just because I might have given too much away too soon. The information will be revealed of course it is just a matter of when.

As for the rest of the story, to quote Shakespeare In Love: "I've not written it!"

I'll write it soon!
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« Reply #9 on: May 11, 2009, 12:18:08 PM »
Ok, I will wait...however, the first part is wonderful!  :)

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« Reply #10 on: May 11, 2009, 01:10:17 PM »
Thank you! Nice to feel encouraged. I've been lacking in motivation for writing in general as of late.
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« Reply #11 on: May 11, 2009, 02:08:04 PM »
You're welcome!  ;)

As I have already said, keep this project alive.

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« Reply #12 on: May 11, 2009, 06:13:51 PM »
I printed your story off so that I could read it better(my eyes aren't very good). I hope this is ok? :) I am not stealing it.

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« Reply #13 on: May 11, 2009, 06:19:09 PM »
I ve also printed your story to read it, since a have problems reading long text online, but for what i ve read so far, i love it! You re very talented (**sighs...i wish i had your talent)

Keep writting, please!

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Re: Advice/Thoughts on Story I'm Writing
« Reply #14 on: May 12, 2009, 05:33:30 AM »
Thank you! Of course it's all right to print it out. I have an eye condition too so I know exactly where you care coming from. I used to use Internet Explorer but got so frustrated at it losing stuff when my computer froze or browser froze I downloaded Firefox and let me tell you I'm never going back to IE. I customized Firefox's print size, so that it is now a size 30 on my computer, and it's just perfect for me.

I'm glad you enjoyed it. I will let you know when I update more!

I am thinking of changing her last name to an authentic aristocratic name but not Romanov because that would be too obvious LOL.
Hatred – this is a disgusting feeling. Yes, there is sport gambling, there is a striving to win. But to hate someone – this is awful! I think, that first of all you have to learn to respect your rival. -- Evgeni Plushenko