Advice/Thoughts on Story I'm Writing

[Vive_HIH_Aleksey]

I wanted to let everyone know that part 2 is up on the same link as above, just scroll down and you will see it. Of course the Wiki articles are ill-researched but because I did them on the spur of the moment I admit I did not put much thought in them. Anyway I hope you like what I have so far.

[RomanovsFan4Ever]

Cool!...I'm going to read it...

[RomanovsFan4Ever]

Excellent job again! ...this story is so intriguing, I like it!

[Olga Maria]

Superb writing. I think it’s not your first time writing a horror story. You’re already an expert in it. (“,)

[Vive_HIH_Aleksey]

Haha well thank you that's a great compliment because it is in fact my first time writing horor. But I watch a lot of horror movies so I think that's why it is working so well this far. I still have not added anything to it yet though.

[Olga Maria]

It's really good and I think you should so it a novel!

[Vive_HIH_Aleksey]

When I am finished with it I PLAN on giving it to Skatefic, it's a legitimate website that buys figure skating-related fiction, both for online and offline publication. I will, of course, have to change Alexei Yagudin and Tatiana Tarasova's names for that! But yeah it would be nice to do that. They pay pretty well.

[Vive_HIH_Aleksey]

I have added more to the story for those interested!

[RomanovsFan4Ever]

Thank you! 

[Vive_HIH_Aleksey]

I have no clue if I am going to keep it the way it is or not! I am struggling with a lot of ideas right now and I am not sure how to handle it...

[RomanovsFan4Ever]

It's good to have a lot of ideas in mind, this means that there is the inspiration. 

[Vive_HIH_Aleksey]

Well, folks, I have updated a tiny bit more!

[RomanovsFan4Ever]

I read the new part of the story right now...it's so brilliant!, you are a very excellent writer! 

[rosieposie]

Well folks, I realize it's been AGES since I last posted on this board, but I still drop in and read the threads. Anyway, I am working on a story and wanted opinions and advice on it.

It's about a young woman who finds a mysterious cotton dress which she plans on using for a figure skating costume. It looks like it is from the 1950s, but what she finds out is that the dress has been altered over the years, but never destroyed. The dress is actually from 1918, and was worn by an Imperial Russian skating star. My plan is that the dress is cursed, it transports the heroine to 1918 and events in the skater's life, and as she finds out more about her, she wonders who could have killed her. There are several possibilities, several people could have motives to kill her. What is eventually discovered is that the skater's husband had something to do with the telegram that gave the order to execute the Imperial Family... Another twist on this is that Liza's brother was, in fact, the Officer (I know he was a fictitious creation by the Bolsheviks but in the story I think I can take a little artistic license) and she decides to warn him, but her husband finds out, thus giving him reason to be the one who actually kills her. So the heroine Kaitlyn finds all this out in an effort to save herself from the same fate that Liza had. There is a MAJOR twist in the end that I cannot give away for the sake of those who want to read it, but I've said basically all that needs to be said.

It's probably a pretty sloppy plotline, but that's what I am thinking so far for it. Any questions, comments, advice is welcome.

This plotline is similar to a famous young adult's novel in Australia.  Called "Playing Beatie Bow".   Where a young teenage girl finds when she is in the park a mysterious waif girl who is dressed in Victoriana clothing.  The main character goes up to the girl and asks why the girl just watches the children playing "Beatie Bow" a game consisiting of children reciting a rhyme something like "Oh mother what is that noise?" and someone being the mother replies "It's nothing dear just the wind, the windows banging, the footsteps of a visitor etc" and finally the "mother" calls out "It's Beatie Bow risen from the dead."  and then the children run around until the mother catches a "victim".

Anyway the m/c follows the mysterious girl and finds herself in Sydney in the 1870/80s  and no way to get back to the present (1980s) and events occur when the girl has no idea how to get back and finds out the mysterious girl is Beatie Bow from the game.   Things happen and finally the girl returns and finds out that the only thing the she keeps as a reminder of her time is a scrap of material is the transport key.

But your story is great and a lot different to the story above.   A dress with a memory.    I enjoyed it.

[Vive_HIH_Aleksey]

Thanks. I'm still struggling with how to continue it. I intended it to be more, well, frightening. But I think that will come in time.