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« Reply #30 on: January 23, 2013, 08:49:48 AM »
Er, why can't I modify my posts?

There is a time limit on modifications. Not sure how long exactly, but certainly not more than 15-30 minutes. It's there to stop people from going back long after the fact and changing what they said and the nature of conversations.

I like your story by the way. Keep it going!
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« Reply #31 on: January 23, 2013, 09:40:55 AM »
Chaos.

Ben had never had the chance to see one of his rifles go to work on a human being.  Oh, of course he'd heard the reports back from the English who'd ordered the first batch.  

"Bloody amazing!"

"Chews through Krauts like a starving bulldog on a plate of roast beef."

But words were one thing.  The oily squish soaking through his moccasins--followed by the smell of filth released by shattered bodies--was another.  Someone far away was screaming, he thought, before he realized that the voice was right in front of his eyes, and that his deafened ears were playing tricks on him.  It was the oldest daughter.  She was clutching the body of the maid.  Slowly, the screaming faded into sobs, yet grew closer.  Ben's auditory fugue faded into the awareness of Karchenko standing right next to him.

"Bozhe moi," the sergeant said, with a surprising degree of sensitivity.  "She's not going to make it."

Ben looked back to the maid.  She had caught a round in the neck.  Red froth bubbled out of a hole beneath her jaw; she was drowning in her own blood.  The maid coughed once, convulsively--then went still.

Ben's attention shifted, took in the rest of the scene.  Under the maid: the rosy-cheeked daughter lay still, but her chest rose and fell in strong, regular breaths.  Probably fright, he thought.  Next to her, crying her heart out, the youngest daughter.  Bunched in one corner, huddled around an unconscious son: the doctor, the tall, auburn-haired, daughter, and a hysterical Empress.  Clutching his wife: the Emperor.  Dead, beside his feet: the two manservants.  Ben suddenly realized he'd shot them both in the head, mistaking them for Bolshevists among the stew of bodies.

Karchenko glanced over, expecting Ben to speak.  Instead, Ben stood there, transfixed, for a solid minute.  Finally, the eldest daughter gently laid the maid's corpse down on the floor, which was now growing quite slippery with blood, then fixed her eyes on the strange men before her.

"W-who are you two?"

Ben wanted to speak, but Karchenko answered first.  "Grand Duchess Olga Nikolaenva, I am Sergeant Mikhail Vladimirovich Karchenko.  You can call me Misha."  He paused and bowed.  "This man here still hasn't given me his full name, but I call him Genghiz.  You can call him whatever you wish."

Behind her, the others slowly turned their heads toward Ben and Karchenko.  A swirl of varied expressions, all slathered under a thick frosting of shock.

Ben blinked twice.  "My name is Venyamin."  He paused, unsure of how to word the next sentence, then tried forcing a smile.  "And Misha is right.  All of you can call me whatever you like."

A streak of bitter sarcasm flared across Olga's blue eyes.  "So, Misha and Veny: are you here to shoot us as well, like you shot Anna Demidova, Trupp, and Kharitonov?"

"He shot Anna?"  The youngest daughter wiped away tears as she spoke, and pointed to her older sister, still lying unconscious beside Anna Demidova.  "And what about Mashka?"

The doctor spoke, briefly.  "It's alright, Nastya.  Mashka will be alright.  She's just fainted from the shock."

Ben spoke.  "I... I, Grand Duchess, that was an accident.  I thought--"

Karchenko smiled, filled in the conversation with ingratiatingly empty words.  "Please, we apologize.  Veny and I--we were sent here to rescue you.  All of you.  Unfortunately, this was a scene of chaos, and it was hard to aim.  Please, forgive us again."

"I guess we should be glad, then, that we came dressed in white?"  As she spoke, she pointed a bloody, accusing finger at the two men.

Karchenko fell silent.  Nor did Ben know how to answer Olga's question.  He had never even considered how the family would feel.  All he had thought about was asking his own questions, yet now they felt childlike and tiny in the face of the enormous tragedy they had just received.  A scarlet flush of guilt crept up his neck.
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« Reply #32 on: January 23, 2013, 09:41:09 AM »
The auburn-haired beauty looked up from the son.  "Please, let's not be rude.  My name is Tatiana Nikolaevna.  You can call me... Tatiana.  Who sent you?"  Her tone was businesslike, sharp.

Karchenko looked to Ben, who paused and dragged forward a name.  "Kolchak.  Kolchak did."  Beside him, Karchenko nodded, eagerly.  Truth be told, he had not kept up with the news outside Yekaterinburg, either.

Inwardly, Ben realized he was spinning another yarn, but he felt as if the truth, far from shedding light on the situation, would only cloud it.

"Kolchak?"  Tatiana turned to her father.  "Was he the admiral who fought so bravely against the Ottomans?"

The Emperor furrowed his brow.  "Yes, my dear."  Privately, he did not like to be reminded of the war, the ultimate wager where gains were measured in kilometers and losses tallied in lives, though he did his best to keep up a strong face in front of his family.

Ben continued, pedantic.  "He's raised an army of Whites in Omsk--monarchists, kadets, octobrists, and the odd Czech.  They're moving west, along the Trans-Siberian Railway."

"Good.  You are not acting alone.  We must go to him, quickly."  Tatiana's voice remained level.

"Why?"

She stepped aside, revealing a marginally calmer Empress squeezing the elbow of her son-- "Because Alyosha--I mean, the Tsarevich--will die if we do not get him to a proper hospital." --then pointed to a quarter-centimeter nick smearing the boy's forearm all the way to his mother's hand.

Karchenko shrugged.  "That won't kill him.  The blood is making it look worse than it is."  

Tatiana's gray eyes flitted to the doctor, then to her father.  Finally, the Emperor nodded.

She cleared her throat.  "The Tsarevich is sick.  He--"

Alexei opened his deep blue eyes and sat up, startling his mother so much she nearly dropped his elbow to the floor.  "Tanya, Tanya.  No need to make it seem like such a frightening secret."  He turned to Karchenko.  "Sergeant, I have hemophilia.  It's a big, scary Latin word the doctors use to say that my blood has trouble clotting solid."

Ben frowned.  The word reminded him of something on the other side of his dreams, but he could not place it.

Alexei continued onward, his voice deadpan.  "It's no big deal, really.  Just have to tie my arm off, rub some yarrow root on it, and hope it doesn't rot and fall off.  And if that doesn't work and I die, I can join Leonid.  No doubt the Reds have already shot him."

Anastasia resumed her sniffle.  "We need to get out of here!"

Tsar Nicholas turned to Alexei.  "Alyosha.  There you go, scaring your sisters again."  He turned back to Ben.  "Well, Nastya is correct.  We need to leave.  Judging by what you said, Veny, we should leave for Omsk."

Karchenko smiled a simple smile, like he had when Ben had first mentioned the treasure.  "Of course, we'd be happy to get you and the family to Admiral Kolchak in Omsk.  Very happy.  Misha and I brought a horse and wagon, and the Bolshevists mentioned a truck.  I don't think they were lying.  They would have needed something to haul you away after they killed--"  Olga shot him a glare, making his voice trip over.

Ben continued Karchenko's sentence, but somberly.  "--anyhow, it should be enough room for everyone, as well as space move those who have... passed on somewhere for a proper burial."

Ben's gaze fell on Tatiana.  Her lips were twisted into a grimace, but she spoke in a flat tone that belied no malice.  "Take Anna, Trupp, and Kharitonov.  Leave the rest here.  They don't deserve it."

The rest of the family nodded in agreement.  Much to his surprise, Ben found himself nodding along as well.
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« Reply #33 on: January 23, 2013, 09:45:11 AM »
Er, why can't I modify my posts?

There is a time limit on modifications. Not sure how long exactly, but certainly not more than 15-30 minutes. It's there to stop people from going back long after the fact and changing what they said and the nature of conversations.

I like your story by the way. Keep it going!

Got it.  I might be posting some corrections as the story advances, then.  Hope everyone is fine with that.  And thanks for the support!

EDIT: One other thing: I deliberately toned down the lethality of firing an AK-47 plus a shotgun into a packed room in order to keep the opening scene of dialog from turning into a screaming match.  I'm going to explain this away later with the jeweled clothes (and possibly some members of the Imperial Family hiding their wounds because they don't fully trust Ben and Karchenko), but even so, in a real situation like this, most of the IF, and Ben and Karchenko themselves, would lucky to be alive, what with all the buckshot and assault rifle bullets ricocheting off the walls.  Needless to say: don't try this at home.
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« Reply #34 on: January 23, 2013, 12:17:48 PM »
Ah, the plot thickens.  Keep going, this is good.
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« Reply #35 on: January 23, 2013, 05:48:47 PM »
Ah, the plot thickens.  Keep going, this is good.

Thanks.  I just hope I got the characterizations right.

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« Reply #36 on: January 23, 2013, 07:39:01 PM »
The forest clearing smelled sweet, even in the darkness.  Ben shifted on one foot, felt for a tree branch by his hand.  Behind his eyes, the epehdra and tea was fading into a hazy synaptic sunset.

The family had said their goodbyes five minutes ago.  Karchenko, Ben, the doctor, and the Emperor leaned against their shovels, wiping off sweat as they finished burying the three servants.

Anastasia spoke.  "I wish we could stay longer."

Tatiana.  "We can't."

"I know, it's just..."

The rest of the family was silent.  Ben carried them past the invisible thicket of branches that marked the edge of the forest clearing, to the truck and the wagon.

Ben made some noises about the need to put some distance between them and the town.  "Those Reds might be looking for their comrades already, and come morning, they most assuredly will."  The rest, tired from being woken in the middle of the night, agreed.  Midway through the impromptu funeral, Ben remembered the Czechs had taken Chelyabinsk.  As that was closer than Omsk, the family agreed to the new destination, but Ben could sense that they were suspicious of the change of plan.  Still, the urgency over Alexei's condition smoothed things over.  Privately, however, Ben was more worried about Marie, since she was still drifting in and out consciousness, delirious.

Karchenko took point on the wagon, with the truck following close behind, since neither the passengers nor the horses wanted to breathe truck exhaust for ten hours straight.  Ben handed Karchenko a map of the region he'd bought off a White officer in Petropavlovsk.  Beside him, Olga sat, holding a lantern and the map.  Behind the two, the Emperor, Marie, and Anastasia squeezed themselves between barrels and sacks.  Karchenko had loaded up two barrels of food--potatoes--and his private stash of gold and banknotes.  He had wanted to leave a note behind for his 'friends', but Ben dissauded him at the last moment, fearing any note would help the Reds find them.

Ben drove the truck.  He was the only one who knew how.

Three years ago, when he had first joined with his partners, hauling steel into their small arms workshop, the driving motions--one hand on the wheel, the other on the stick; one foot over the accelerator and brake, the other on the clutch--came to him like a fish being reintroduced to water.  He didn't think any of it at the time, but after seeing a worker pitch their workshop's first truck forward and into the Pearl River when he should have put it in reverse, Ben began to wonder if he had prior, forgotten, knowledge of driving.

A noise.  Ben couldn't place it.  Then he looked over, and realized Tatiana, cuddled up against the passenger-side door, was snoring.  Behind him, in the covered truck bed, Empress Alexandra and the doctor tended to Alexei's wound.  The truck jostled over a bump, and Tatiana shifted in her seat.  The snoring ended.

"Are we there?"

Ben shook his head, before realizing the darkness probably rendered non-verbal gestures futile.  "No.  We're still about a day away."

"If the truck doesn't stop, you mean."

"Right."

"If the Whites hold Chelyabinsk, and the Reds hold Yekaterinburg, we'll have to cross the front line, yes?"

"Yes."

A beat.

"That might be a risk."

"If that's what it takes," Ben said in lieu of his normal shrug.

"That's not what I meant."  Tatiana shifted in her seat, leaned away.

"Then what did you mean?"

"What I mean is, why?  Why are you risking your lives for us?  Why are you doing this, really?"

"I-I thought we told you."

"Kolchak?"

"Yes."  Ben gripped the steering wheel tightly, two eyes focused hard on the dark shape of the horse and wagon in front of him.  They were driving without running lights, and Ben did not want to collide with them in the darkness.

"You said Kolchak had an army of kadets, octobrists, monarchists, and Czechs.  Of those four groups, two hate us, one would not want to risk their countrymen for a foreign Emperor, and the final one needs the support of the other three to accomplish its goals.  So you tell me, why would they send men to save us?"

Ben voice went weak.  "Maybe we're working for a reward."  He felt a curious sense of dread at the long trip stretching out in front of him.  She's smarter than me, he realized.

Tatiana shook her head so vigorously Ben felt her hair brush his shoulder.  "What they lack in men, they lack even more in funds.  What's more, while the monarchists could sneak someone out to help us, they'd need the approval of everyone to write a check."  She dropped her voice low.  "So why are you here?  And who sent you?"

A check?  More like checkmate, Ben thought.  He responded the only way he knew how.  "I--I don't know."

"You don't know?  How can a man not know why he would shoot a dozen other people?"

Beat.

Ben broke the silence.  "Did those Reds know why they were going to shoot you?"

Her voice was low, skeptical.  "What do you mean?  Of course.  They had orders."

Ben shook his head.  "What I mean is, did they know why they had those orders?  And what's more, did they know why they had to kill not only your father, but your mother and your brother, your sisters, the doctor, and yourself as well?"

Now it was Tatiana's turn to be silent.  Ben broke it.  "I'm sorry.  I shouldn't have mentioned--"

"It's alright.  It's just that we don't know each other, and the past year has taught me that if I don't know someone, more likely than not, they wish to bring harm upon me or my family."

Ben grimaced.  He realized her words had a ring of truth.  While he did not want to hurt them, Ben was under no illusions that his interest in them was mostly selfish.
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« Reply #37 on: January 25, 2013, 04:15:41 AM »
Ben grimaced.  He realized her words had a ring of truth.  While he did not want to hurt them, Ben was under no illusions that his interest in them was mostly selfish.

In the lantern-light ahead, Ben saw Olga waving her finger about at Karchenko.  Tatiana noticed, too.

"It looks like your friend said something improper again."

Ben gave a snort.  "He does that often."

"How did you meet him?"

"I stayed at his inn in Yekaterinburg."

A brief pause.  Tatiana asked the next question in an innocent tone.  "He's an innkeeper?"

"Yeah."

"And his business is doing well?"

Ben shrugged.  "I assume so."

"So why did he seem so happy to just pack up his things and leave with us, then?"

Ben shifted in his seat, which suddenly felt as if it was made out of nails.  "Because... because he supports the monarchy.  He was a sergeant, after all."

Tatiana laughed.  The sound awakened distant memories.  "Some of the guards I met in Tobolsk were sergeants too.  They all hated us."

Ben wondered how she could joke about that.  "Well, if it makes you feel better, I'm pretty sure Karchenko doesn't hate you."

"Of course.  You just said he supports us."  She chuckled again.  "What would make me feel better is knowing the reasons you're here."

Ben sighed, turned his head.  In the gloom, he could barely make out Tatiana's almond-shaped eyes.  "We heard the Bolsheviks were holding jewels in the Ipatiev House."

"So you decided to rob it?" 

"Yes.  We planned on hiding in the cellar until the guards were asleep."

A pause.  "Well, that's the most logical statement you've made all day."

"I try to make sense."

"You're not very good at it.  Your friend's a lot better."

Ben snorted.  "Your sister doesn't seem to agree."

"She does that often."  Both of them laughed.  Tatiana leaned back against the passenger door.  "So where did you learn to drive?"

"In Canton."

"Canton... China?  That's quite far away.  And you came to Russia to..."

"For-- for business."

"Business?"

Ben was relieved he no longer had to lie.  "My partners and I run an arms factory in Canton.  We were looking for customers."

"Not among the Reds, I hope."

"No, they don't tend to pay on time."

She laughed.  "So.  You're an arms merchant, a thief, and a murderer.  Somehow, it seems you ought to be taller."

"Pardon me?"

"Nothing. Forget it."  She turned her head sideways.

Ben shrugged, resumed driving.

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« Reply #38 on: January 25, 2013, 11:15:31 AM »
You seem to be paying close attention to Tatiana here.  Is she going to play a big part in your story?  I only ask because she had a major role in mine.
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« Reply #39 on: January 25, 2013, 12:05:06 PM »
You seem to be paying close attention to Tatiana here.  Is she going to play a big part in your story?  I only ask because she had a major role in mine.
'Screen time' OTMA is going to go mainly to Olga, Tatiana, and (later) Alexei as a sort of Freudian trio of the id, superego, and ego.  A major part of the story is going to involve how different family members either stay aloof from or engage in the Civil War.

Minor spoilers--

Some of the grand duchesses are going to get betrothed to foreign princes.  Some won't.  Some will take sides, some won't.  Some may even fall in love with socialists.  

Alexei will face a pivotal test as to whether he wants to, or even can, handle being a political symbol (he's going to experience Yeltsin's quote about how it is hard to "sit on a throne of bayonets").  I really think the Alexei character has a lot of potential, as he morphs from a sickly, lonely knight in sour armor into someone who embraces his responsibilities and rallies people to him.

Olga will have to reconcile her heart's desire to marry someone she loves with limited familial pressure and growing external pressure to marry a foreign prince, such as the man-child Edward VIII, to secure foreign support for the Whites.  Also, she is going to be the most impacted--but not necessarily the most swayed--by public opinion, as she is the eldest of the Romanov children.

Tatiana's story will revolve around her search for a 'normal' life, and a softening of her rigid edges.  Definitely a sugar and ice and/or defrosting ice queen trope.

I haven't thought about the younger two daughters yet.

The Emperor and Empress will exile themselves.  One of the pieces of advice they will hear is to "not fight fire with fire, find a good wife for Alyosha, and tell him to raise his children well, for that is how long the Bolsheviks will take to burn out."

Also, I may intro a character or two from the Bolshevik side--the shortlist is Frunze, Tukhachevsky, Trotsky, Bukharin, or Dzerzhinsky.

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« Reply #40 on: January 26, 2013, 11:02:24 AM »
Ah, thanks for the info. 
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« Reply #41 on: February 04, 2013, 09:05:40 AM »
It began to rain in the Perm Governate, and the borrowed Fiat slid past the hooded eyes of the trees.  The road was empty, bar the occassional deer, although the truck sometimes slipped on muddy ruts that had to have come from recent traffic.  Tatiana resumed snoring in the passenger seat.  The wagon ahead stopped.  A figure jumped off--big, burly.  Karchenko disappeared into the woods.  Ben heard him relieving himself.  Then, without warning, the sergeant appeared in front of Ben's truck and tapped his shoulder through the doorframe of the Fiat truck.

"She asleep, too?"

"Yeah."

Karchenko made a 'come hither' motion.  Ben tilted his head closer.  Karchenko whispered, "I just spent the past two hours sweet-talking 'Olenka', as her sisters call her, into thinking I'm a decent, upright Sergeant after nothing more than her safety."  He paused, searched his canvas pockets for a cigarette, found none.  "You wanna get the jewels at daybreak?"

Ben sighed.  "Sounds like a plan to me.  What are we supposed to do, just ask?"

Karchenko nodded.  "All we need to do is make some noises about compensation, and how much risk we've taken on their behalf."

"Sounds reasonable, except I just told Tatiana we were in the house for the jewels."

"Wh-what?"

"She asked me why we were there.  None of the reasons I could think of made sense, so I just told her truth."

Karchenko snorted.  "...and there goes two hours of enduring that Grand Duchess prattle on and on about how we are uncivilized butchers for killing the maid and manservants.  Now she's going to feel justified."

Ben shrugged.  "We did kill them.  But we also did save their lives, after all.  She should remember that."

Rustles from the back of the truck, barely audible over the idling engine.  Karchenko paused, then went on.  "Fair enough.  I think we can stop for a while, though.  I'd much rather ask them for the jewels while we're still sitting in Bolshevik territory."

Ben nodded.  "Makes sense.  That would be the civilized thing to do."

Karchenko stroked his day-old stubble.  "What are you saying?  Are you sympathizing with these people?"

"What if I am?"

"I want to make one thing very clear.  By protecting this family, we've made ourselves hated by nine out of every ten Russians.  Their jewels are not nearly enough payment for that risk."

A beat.  Ben danced his fingers on the wooden steering wheel in rhythm with the falling raindrops, then spoke.  "Get back on the wagon.  I'll work something out with them."  He leaned back into his seat.  "Go."

Karchenko turned, disappointed, like a man leaving an empty shop window.


Ben blinked into the morning sun.  It followed the final few curtains of rain over the southeastern horizon, then filtered itself through Ben's jacket and eyelids.  It would not let him sleep.

They were stopped at a twenty-meter long bridge over an unnamed creek.  Down below, Ben could hear the noises of the girls and the Empress doing their washing under the span, their high-pitched chatter landing on his eardrums, contributing to his insomnia.  Karchenko snored loudly on the wagon.  The Emperor and the doctor--was his name Botkin? Ben thought--stood watch above, hands in their pockets.  Neither Ben nor Karchenko trusted them with their guns; Karchenko, out of greed; Ben, because he figured both men as bad shots.

Karchenko, to his credit, had not slowed down after the night's discussion.  They'd made good time, and they were a mere six hours away from Chelyabinsk now.  Ben was surprised at the quiet along the road, in spite of the heavy ruts in the road.

A noise behind Ben made him give up his last pretense of sleep.  Ben lifted the canvas flap separating the truck compartment from the cab.  "What is it, Alexei?"

"Could you teach me how to use that rifle of yours?"

Ben snorted.  "I could.  Maybe when we get to Chelyabinsk."

"No, if I get there, I'd have the doctor and mother and all the rest piled on me again, and they wouldn't let me leave the bed."

Ben shrugged.  "So?"

Through the canvas flap, a boy's hand--soft, pale--emerged with a palm-sized sapphire pendant.  "I'll give you this for it."

Ben almost wanted to laugh.  "Boy, it's not smart to give a stranger jewelry.  He might think you have more, and kill you for it."  But he took the pendant. 

And so Ben found himself crouched over Alexei in a stand of birch about thirty paces west of the bridge.

"So the first thing you do when you have this gun, is you make sure it is unloaded.  You do that by removing the magazine--then setting the safety to fire, then pulling the charging handle--that's this little nub here--all the way back.  See that?  It's empty inside.  Good.  Now you do it."

Ben handed Alexei the magazine and the rifle.  Alexei stared into the black banana-shaped box of rounds, at the starburst of the morning sun reflecting off golden brass.  Then he jammed the magazine into the rifle, lifted it to his shoulder, and aimed it squarely at Ben's chest.  Ben thought he heard muffled footsteps--or was it his own heartbeat?

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« Reply #42 on: February 04, 2013, 09:07:07 AM »
"I heard what you and Karchenko were talking about."

Of course, Ben thought.  "Oh?"

"Yes, and I'm not going to let you and that bastard hurt my family."

"What makes you think we will?"

The boy's eyes narrowed.  "You lied about Kolchak.  You lied about helping us."

"So what?  We saved you all the same, didn't we?"

More footsteps.  "Yes, and you shot Demidova, Trupp, and Kharitonov because you thought they might want to keep the jewels for themselves.  And now you'll just find an empty spot in the forest and kill us all, and take the jewels for yourselves."

Ben furrowed his brow.  "Son, let's entertain this train of thought for a while.  What makes you think we know where the jewels are?"

"I'm not your son.  I only have two fathers--the one up above and the one on the bridge.  And how does that have to do with anything?"

"Because if we don't know where the jewels are, and we kill you, that makes it difficult for us to find them, no?"

Alexei's eyes narrowed even further, until they were no wider than Ben's.  "You don't know where we've kept them?"

Ben shook his head.  "No."  The footsteps grew loud, became real.  Alexei heard them, turned around.  The next few seconds passed in slow motion.  Ten meters off, Red Army soldier dashed from the trees, knife in hand.  The boy panicked, squeezed the trigger in one long pull.  Pink mist popped from the soldier's legs, then his abdomen, before the muzzle climbed into the sky and the rounds hit empty, chopping tree branches.  A cacophony of chirps answered them, the forest itself seeming to scream in agony.

Alexei stood there, frozen.  Ben reacted, raw instinct now, pushed him out of the way while grabbing the rifle and starting for the bridge.  He heard shouts behind them, indistinct.  Ten men, maybe more.

Karchenko was propped up in the wagon.  "What's going on?  And why is the Tsarevich with you?"

Ben shook his head sharply.  "Never mind that.  Get the girls, tell them we need to move.  Now!"  Ben turned towards the span, picked out the doctor and the Emperor crouched and running towards them.  Good, he thought, at least those two know what to do.

Behind Ben, Alexei had already stumbled into the truck's passenger seat.  Ben followed, keyed the ignition, then shoved the rifle back into Alexei's hands.

"I drive.  You shoot.  Keep their heads down."

The first of the Bolshevik men appeared, knelt by the riverbank, took a hasty shot from sixty meters off.  The round skated off the hood of the engine, scorching a trail of paint from right to left.

Alexei aimed out the door, let a long burst rip.  It went high, but forced the shooter into ducking for cover.  Ben let his eyes drift for a moment, found the Tsar and the doctor through the windshield, huddled behind the wheel of Karchenko's wagon.  Two more soldiers appeared.  Alexei stitched another burst across the riverbank, this time with more accuracy; one of the men hit the ground.

Ben counted off the seconds, hoping the rest of the family was still alright.  The younger two daughters and the Empress appeared, half-dressed.  The charmeuse slip of the rosy-cheeked daughter--Ben remembered they called her Mashka--was torn and streaked with blood.  They hurried on the wagon, the Tsar and the doctor covering them with a blanket, and then their own bodies.  No sign of Tatiana, Olga, or Karchenko.  Then Ben heard the boom of Karchenko's berdanka.

"Oh shit," Ben muttered, then nudged the truck forward so that it covered the wagon.  Then he leapt from the drivers' seat and scrambled under the bridge, little puffs of dirt trailing his ankles.  He found them behind the stout logs joining the bridge to the slanted riverbank.

Karchenko was reloading his shotgun.  Olga and Tatiana crouched beside him.  A fusillade of shots splashed the water under the bridge.  Olga leaned out, defiant, and answered with three aimed shots from Karchenko's Nagant.  Tatiana grabbed her shoulder, wrenched her back.  "Are you insane?"

"Let go of me, Tanya, I can shoot them myself."  Then she stood up again.  As she stepped out again, a round grazed her hip.  Tatiana caught her as she fell, pulled her back in.  Ben tapped her shoulder; their eyes met.  She offered Ben her wounded sister's hand.  Lifting both shoulders, they carried her forward.  Behind them, they heard Karchenko popping shots from the Nagant.  Ben hoped he had the sense to do it blind.

Ben poked his head above the start of the span, waited.  Alexei fired a long burst, then Ben and Tatiana rushed forward, dumping Olga into the back of the truck.  Tatiana followed her, and Karchenko jumped on the wagon's freeboard, whipping the horses into a quick trot.  Ben hopped in the cab, landed painfully on two searingly hot empty magazines on the driver's seat.  He noted with mild astonishment that Alexei was unhurt, then gunned the engine forward.

Alexei continued firing, suppressing the Reds in the treeline, until they were clear of the bridge.  When he emptied the last magazine in the direction of the bridge, he turned to Ben, gave the barest hint of a grin.  "Now that, my friend, was the civilized thing to do."
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Re: untitled Romanov story (feedback welcome!)
« Reply #43 on: February 04, 2013, 11:10:36 AM »
Very intense and well written.

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"I want to make one thing very clear.  By protecting this family, we've made ourselves hated by nine out of every ten Russians.  Their jewels are not nearly enough payment for that risk."

Anyone of course could say this, but is it really true? The second sentence that is. It could just be that he was attempting to deliver his point by exaggerating some.
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« Reply #44 on: February 04, 2013, 02:37:53 PM »
Very intense and well written.

Thanks!

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"I want to make one thing very clear.  By protecting this family, we've made ourselves hated by nine out of every ten Russians.  Their jewels are not nearly enough payment for that risk."

Anyone of course could say this, but is it really true? The second sentence that is. It could just be that he was attempting to deliver his point by exaggerating some.

It's an exaggeration.  Karchenko is the designated melodramatic foil to Ben's quiet persona.